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[don't you just love the smell of lightnin'?]

withholding sharp of barb-ed fork.
un-pitching mirth - Nebraska corn.
a loathsome husker huffs windy bluster,
in feckless lust o'er freckled lass.

she heard your word; you oink like pork,
breath rank and mean, with beard unshorn.
you, trailer trash, lure a killing twister.
she hooks the sky... then, lets it pass.

mother earth by men brought dark,
while women bless the harvest morn.
that girl has power beyond you, Buster.
thank the stars; she spared your ass.

sing it!:
"oh my darlin', oh my darlin', Omaha doll, inclement time...
she is gone, but not forgotten, oh my darlin' Clementine."


llp - dA - jan2012
her being a 'white witch', Clementine
has secret powers over the elements.

you didn't know that? it's true... :nod:

small edit - added double ellipse - 1/19/2012.
added sub-title - 2/6/2012.
edit - couple of punctuation fixes - sep23/2012.
edits - added two lines, and tidied up - [now, a modified sonnet form] - may08/2013.
edit - changed one word for better assonance/consonance - [huffs] - may14/2013.
edit - 'loathsome' for more exacting description - may17/2013.
edit - reconfigured the last stanza, so y'all can get it 'now' - jun19/2013.
edit - third line - 'stone' - aug15/2013.
edit - reworked the last stanza for the 'singing' part - sep16/2013.
edit - one final, [i promise], change to that last stanza - oct3/2013.
edits - little ones, [i lied], just fiddle-fartin' around - oct31/2013.
edits - present tensing of 1st stanza - and repost - jul09/2014.

;) pip
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:iconmaxnort:
maxnort Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014   Writer
I have suspected it for some time. you are truly shameless.

I am damn proud to know you.
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:iconalapip:
alapip Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
"shameless", and now speechless...  :O
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:iconmaxnort:
maxnort Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014   Writer
what? any man who will perpetrate that, and then continue to revisit it has much to teach.
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:iconalapip:
alapip Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
but still:
i might consider a larger percentage
of the myriad of things that might be considered,
but my percentage remains far short
of the percentage of things that should be considered
- pip - 7-09-2014 

anyway, Max, thanks for saying what you say. ;)
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:iconmaxnort:
maxnort Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014   Writer
...very considerate of you...
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:iconalapip:
alapip Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
yes, i know... :rofl:

...:O
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:iconrunnrabbitrunn:
RUNNrabbitRUNN Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2014
i am ever convinced of your infamy, pip.






i believe that says all.
-rab
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:iconalapip:
alapip Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thanks, Rab, for bringing me back to this,
so i could make some changes and repost it too.
i tend to tend it like a garden - pulling weeds.

maybe i should line it with medium sized rocks?

hah - the infamous pip - ;)
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:icondragon-fly-to-me:
dragon-fly-to-me Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013
for a few minutes, I thought this might be about Carlos Danger...but then I realized that you wrote it before we were all introduced to him. ;)
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:iconalapip:
alapip Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Carlos Danger? whodat?
oh, nevermind.  i sense
extraneousness. ;)
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