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Quantu Unive Accumu Inte by *alapip:iconalapip:



"Quantum Universal Accumulated Intelligence"

perhaps the theoretical QUAI
would see us evolve to qualify.

perhaps they 'tweak' us onward,
keep our progress moving forward.

perhaps we are 'mentored'
our identity to be centered.

perhaps we disappoint...


llp - nov'09 - dA


~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~


"final report - garden failure"

on a planet, in a forest, by a gently flowing stream,
the colors may be alien but what matters is our dream,
a dream of their survival in an elemental way,
the same as all the entities we represent today.

vast changes in the flow, as in evolution's path,
their arrogance is showing. they tinker with the math.
natural - intentional, how do we make this choice?
how make this last decision, who is to have the voice?

perhaps the only answer is to simply turn our backs,
but would we be at fault for a disaster in our tracks?
one thing is for certain, there is failure on this site,
as we leave would it be best to turn off every light?

[i've come to love these emotional fools -
but rules are rules are rules are rules...]


llp - (aug'07) - posted  jan'09 - dA
©2009 *alapip
:iconalapip:

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sometimes, don't you get the feeling
you are being watched? and, if they
watch, what must they think, these
beings, vastly evolved, far beyond
our understanding?

is has been said, that at times in
the past, even now perhaps, they
deign to walk among us.

pip

made some technical edits
as per my good buddy Len.
thank you, Leonard.

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:iconheavymidst:
Perhaps our input to the 'QUAI' thus far is leading the evolution of another new world across the galaxy or many across the universe.
Hidden by Owner
:iconalapip:
now, Jerry, can you really imagine
us being a good example for other
species to emulate?

i can't

more likely, we are the laughing
stock of the cosmos. we're famous
all over the universe. [infamous?]

:)pip

--
when a man refers to the woman
[who chose him], as his better half,
for once, he tells the truth. - llp - nov'09
:iconheavymidst:
Any breed that grows by feeding off the unconscious 'QUAI' may do just as we have done.

All the more reason to straighten our act.
We must strive to evolve along the best examples and discourage wrongful practices to be mimicked.

'Keep the stream of meme clean'

Jerry:)
:iconleurindal:
wow - the second poem's beginning and end both mesmerised me.

I think that the poem has a lovely rhythm - a rhythm which the comma in the middle of line 2 seems to impair.

Also, final parenthesis - why not join the two lines in one single bracketed sentence:

(i've come to love these emotional fools -
but rules are rules are rules are rules...)

well done pip '07, well done pip '09 :)

--
"Beauty is truth, truth beauty," - that is all
Ye know on earth, and all ye need to know.

J. Keats
:iconalapip:
actually, back in '07 i still thought
the comma was supposed
to go after "but", and didn't
notice it when i reposted it.
later on, i was led to think
that but 'always' was supposed
to have a comma 'before' it.

i added the bracketed sentences
when i posted it yeaterday. i don't
know the correct techniques
for bracketing, thanks, Len.

and, you know how i love ellipses!

right after i send this, the edits
will be done... <--ellipse!

:)pip

--
when a man refers to the woman
[who chose him], as his better half,
for once, he tells the truth. - llp - nov'09
:iconalapip:
hmmm, i was thinking that
we wouldn't generally reach
for the QUAI, only the 'sighted'
would do that, basically
uncorrupted seers, muses, etc.

the QUAI would do the reaching
out to nudge us away from
planetery disaster, i think is
what happens...(?)

most of the used consciousness
coming from our planet into the
QUAI, would be absorbed, then
ignored, don't you think?

i'm formulating a plan in
relation to the QUAI. i'll
note you about it, Jer.

;)pip

--
when a man refers to the woman
[who chose him], as his better half,
for once, he tells the truth. - llp - nov'09
:iconleurindal:
:)

--
"Beauty is truth, truth beauty," - that is all
Ye know on earth, and all ye need to know.

J. Keats
:iconheavymidst:
You may be right, Pip.
I think all the muck of lowlife ideals could filter out or sink back to Earth leaving only the good to rise and join the QUAI.

Jerry:)

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