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when leaves speak they rustle
but shan't talk of lost cattle

out of bags like cats lying
purring perhaps stirring

gainsaying the language
of pictures - much fewer
than one thousand words
whispered soft - softer

ours to read into
by catching a hint of
some spiciness brewed
a sugaring of love -

or upcoming danger
a giving or taking
from whom in this strange land
once was a stranger

by this chance assessed
through one's cup or glass
darkly lit yet it be
from wet leavings of tea

hopefully let it be
the sugaring of love -


llp - dA - jan2013
DD - feb1/2013
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Given 2013-02-01
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BareYourMasque Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015  Student Writer
I like it(:

My sister is in love with Earl Grey Tea. 

Or any tea really. I adore metaphors. Especially poetry speaking of women in so many unique abstract senses. 
I've a soft spot for the feminine. 

This is gorgeous(:
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alapip Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Also Sam, there's a 'literary' reference,
or play on words, in almost every stanza... ;)

"I've a soft spot for the feminine. " - Me too.
[Thank you for faving]
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BareYourMasque Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2015  Student Writer
My pleasure(:

(I love playing find the devices :3)
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halcyonshores Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I am so happy for you dear Pip.. and so well deserved the DD for this beautiful, brilliant and musical piece.. :clap:
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, Dove, and of course for the fav too... :heart:
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halcyonshores Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure it was :rose:
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013
Congratulations on the DD, this piece really deserved it!
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, and for the fav too! :)
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013   Writer
congrats, pip! it was a matter of time =]
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:iconalapip:
alapip Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, Zean! :heart:
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JaySpeirs Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
Very nice work and I dare say the DD was long overdue.
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wow! thank you, Jay! :)
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nighttimebeautiful Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   Writer
congrats pip! :heart:
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, Sara! :heart:

a question, would it be better
to remove the last two lines?
[i'm leaning that way]

no one has mentioned the little
surprise in almost every stanza.
they should be easy to notice,
but maybe not? [except for the
first one].

;) pip
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nighttimebeautiful Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   Writer
i love it just the way it is i think,
it wraps it all up very neatly. :)
i didn't notice anything out
of the ordinary, but you are very sneaky ;)
(please tell me!!) :heart:
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
well, ok...

stanza 1 is easy - a play on two meanings of rustle - leaves/cattle.
2 - cats out of the bag.
3 - a picture, worth 1000 words.
4 - none - just kind of nice.
5 - stranger in a strange land.
6 - through a glass, darkly.
7 -
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nighttimebeautiful Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   Writer
very sneaky you are indeed ;)
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oops!

7 - none again.

actually, i've done quite a bit of this,
but it's rarely mentioned by anyone.
is it not supposed to be done? :O

can i ask, what you're doing nowadays?
my retirement is still heaven!

:heart:
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dreamylittlethings Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
congrats!!! :D
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Bexy! great to hear from you!
and, thanks. now i gotta go see
what you've posted lately. :heart:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013   Writer
:+fav: So late to see and fav this, but it's done now.
Congratulations on the DD, so deserved by a man like you, not to mention your poetry; the way you "reply" to others' work, and the way you always help new writers win their awards. :iconclappingplz: ... :iconfireworkplz: ... :iconheartloveplz:Wotcher
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i have to admit, Wotcher,
feeling just a bit validated... :w00t:

:heart:
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catnip5 Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
Gorgeous writing!!!!
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, Cat! ;)
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MichaelGarcia7 Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Fantastic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, Michael! :)
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MichaelGarcia7 Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Professional Writer
You're very welcome!
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CielPhantomhive-plz Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
Such a fine piece of work. I never would have thought Earl Grey Tea could have such beauty in it~
Congratulations of your first Daily Deviation. You deserve it.
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, Ciel, for
such a fine comment! :)
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CielPhantomhive-plz Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
You're quite Welcome~
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crimsonsable Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Student Writer
Brilliant! :)
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, Tanner! :)
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Zee-Who Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist
Congrats on your Daily Deviation!:squee::heart:
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you Catalin! :)
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scatteredwords Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the DD! Your first one? It was overdue. :)
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, Liz! you being published, i take
your comment as quite validating...

:heart: pip
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crossing-ariel Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
Congrats! Well-deserved. :clap:
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, Miss. :heart:
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013   Writer
Congrats Pip! This has an ambience befitting the subject. Well done.
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, Shane! :)
[for all you do on dA too]
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013   Writer
:)
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
Beautiful work! congrats on the DD (:
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, Megan, for the fav and watch too! :heart:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
I was surprised to see that I wasn't already watching you!
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KCsummerz Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconcongratsdd1plz::iconcongratsdd2plz::iconcongratsdd3plz:
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, Cheyenne! ;)
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TRexyBusiness Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
A lovely poem.
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alapip Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, Trexy... :)
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TRexyBusiness Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course.
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